Heres #2 Draft Of My Manga Tell Me Wat U Think?

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I should get done with 3 tomorro
He gets up to find his razor and he stumbles on to an old family photo He is fixated on it for some time he then got up walks out of his room and looks into hall way to her door he opens the door and looks in and sees her laying not in the bed but in the corner of the room sleeping with his coat in her hands he then shuts the door And goes to sleep in his parents room he has the same nightmares he has had for 3 years he wakes up and goes to his kit but remembers the girl he goes to her room and she is not there he has no idea where she went and goes to his room to change to go out side to look he notices his door to his room is open slightly he quietly opens it all the way and sees her intertwined in his covers on his bed with his coat next to her still he sees that its very dirty with blood and dirt on it he walks over to take it to wash it he grabs it and she moves slightly he backs up and knocks down his kit and his tools disperse over the ground and the noise wakes the girl he looks up at her and she is looking at his tools with the same depressed expression that she had the day before he rushes to pick it all up and mistakenly grabs a razor out of its case and slices hand open and the girls eyes go black and she starts to cry and squeezes his coat even more he gets up and grabs a bandages from a compartment in his hit and wraps his finger up he stands up and lets the girl know he’s ok. He takes her down stairs and cooks her a meal  she is hesitant to eat at first then she tries it and loves it he hurries to make her more, he thinks to himself when was the last time she has had real meal she gets done eating and he tries to ask her some questions but no answers to any he doesn’t even know her name. Then theres a knock at the door
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